#1 - Nocturnal
crooning sleepy melodies, breaks the silence of the night
#2 – Somnolent
eyes evoke forgotten dreams, Jekyll sleeps and Hyde rises.
#3-In rhythmic chugs to
destination, the train breaks the cold silence of hearts.
#4 - Daughter smiles, dissent
melts, sun peeps out of cold shadows, welcomes me home.
#5 – Adults in gross dialogues, tick
the clock as candid conversations
#6 – Closing the ears stimulates the child’s
hearing capability.
Meeting the Bar: American Sentences with Gay
I have clubbed two lines as they seemed to stand alone and also synchronize.
ha.yes it does seem to help them hear.
ReplyDeletei would love to travel by train as well.
hey, you got your wish, and got to see more of them. smiles.
Very interesting. I like these a lot! Well done. :-)
ReplyDeleteEach has been given thought and consideration; I like them as couplets - the hiatus between the two is easily filled in by the mind - the point of good poetry, I think. Excellent work, thank you.
ReplyDeleteI specially like the 4th one, the welcoming smiles are the best ~
ReplyDeleteI like #4 too. Daughter smiles always bring joy!
ReplyDeleteoh nice....the train has such a soothing rhythm.... we used to travel a lot by train when i was a kid - and til today it is something so special and comforting for me...love it...
ReplyDeleteNice American sentences! My favorites are #2 and #4.
ReplyDeleteLove your last one, smile - is everything! :)x
ReplyDeleteLove number four too!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Oh, they are all so fresh and unexpected! (With a unique, Akila flavour.) I like the way you've paired them, too.
ReplyDeleteOh so good! :-D
ReplyDeleteYou wrote these so well, Akila! I enjoyed them!
ReplyDeleteLike Gay, I want to say 'thank you' as well.
ReplyDeleteThese combinations are really enchanting. Little scenes to be expanded I would have thought.