Ah! Those desires! rolled into one
Hibernated ball, known to none
Evoking a tickle
of ephemeral moments of fickle
formations, of dreams spun
birthing fleeting joyous seconds, shun,
Shut (cocooned) dusted and done
as wishful definitions of a string-less wriggle
Ah! Those desires!
Transmuting an insouciant run
Into a velocity, crashing into a ton
of emotions packed within, shedding nickel
falsies to break-free the knuckle
Bending at will to break, heckle
the mundane into a journey once begun
Ah! Those desires
Very cool refrain.. and a nice flow.. really difficult rhymes to choose.. but it works...
ReplyDeleteReally good - the rentrement/refrain and your clever use of slant rhymes amke this a delight to read.
ReplyDeleteSo true you speak and wonderfully justified the form!
ReplyDeleteWell done with the refrain ~ Such a challenging rhyming pattern ~ Cheers & have a lovely weekend ~
ReplyDeleteI admire your ability to get those rhymes to work - it's so easy to back yourself into a corner with something so 'fixed' as this form. This was my first ever and it did make me scratch my head a few times! Well done!
ReplyDeleteOh, neatly rhymed! I enjoyed this.
ReplyDeletewishful definitions of a string-less wriggle,,,ha, nice...shedding nickle falsies...ha....you had fun with this...you can tell...smiles.
ReplyDeleteAmid the leaps and swirls of flight here is the dream of it all, dusted and done, but Ah! those desires. Nice!
ReplyDeleteWow...lots of fun to read...shredded nickel speaks loudly ;)
ReplyDeleteAn exciting ride!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Nicely done. Very good use of the form.
ReplyDeleteComplex rhymes and I appreciate vocab, good form and a lot of thought!
ReplyDeleteVery nicely handled..lovely wordplay! Enjoyed reading, Akila.
ReplyDeleteGreat energy here! Works so well with subject-- the form like a springboard. Thanks. Karin of Manicddaily
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