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Thursday, September 5, 2013

THE FOUR WALLS

KNOCK! KNOCK!! KNOCK!!!...

Un-inviting elements seat to steer
Thoughts in quandary
Meeting premonition
Of indecisive perceptions
Derailing momentum
Taking on scheme of things
Plotted to swivel the balance
Composing long breaths, beating heavy,
Perspiring sobs in silence
Holding a full stop in abeyance


Till….

Rhythm musters to sync with the new song
Scooping on the remnants
Tied and knotted into a platter
Waiting to gather the settled dust
To re-visit HopE in the chAmbers of desiRes breaThing




 Sam has us trying riddles. 

14 comments:

  1. Lovely take Akila! Deals more with emotional elements the way I see it! Great!

    Hank

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  2. re-visiting HopE in the chAmbers of desiRes breaThing...ha..i like.. the chamber of desire is cool...and sometimes it's just time for a new song...eh..

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  3. ha. i like how you hid heart in the last line.....smiles...the answer right before our eyes....very cool riddle...and i like the full stop...smiles.

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  4. ah the emotions I get... but pipointing the solution is very hard...

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  5. Nicely done...great riddle composed of all the emotions of the heart..I hear the hope ;)

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  6. Cleverly done. 'Holding a full stop in abeyance' oh very good!
    Anna :o]

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  7. Could it be the rythym of the song, or the drums, or percussion?

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  8. Thanks to Brian's article on Monday, I think I have it! HEART! Clever.

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  9. Well I wouldn't have guessed it ~ Cool on the hidden word ~

    Happy weekend ~

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  10. Love the hidden answer (thanks) ...and did you describe the four chambers?

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  11. Well done hiding the answer in plain sight!

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