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Friday, May 31, 2013

A VISUAL TREAT


Eyes breathe
Flailing passion
Buoyant orange simmers
Assimilate vignettes into
Leaves, scalped from tender stems, in symmetry
Weave whimsical scenarios
In aerial havens
A canvass that
Eyes breathe.



Have tried it in rictameter, hopefully it has fallen in place.



10 comments:

  1. "Eyes breathe
    flailing passion" -- really effective synesthesia.
    Well done!

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  2. a canvas eyes breathe is a very cool closure on this...scalped from the tender stems really jumps out...

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  3. The canvas is beautiful ~ Like that aerial havens ~

    Lovely work on the reictameter form too ~

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  4. Love the breathing eyes... :-)

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  5. Wonderfully written and great use of the prompt. And you brought it all together in a few well-chosen words/images.

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  6. a canvas that eyes breathe...so cool...and how the leaves weave whimsical scenarios...i like..

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  7. Really like the idea of eyes breathing!

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  8. ..aww..excellent Akila! loved the eyes breathe... so true... so true... i often drink the scenes thru my eyes... and smell the sky...yours are completely mesmerizing... thanks... smiles...

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