Strapped wrist
Peels thoughts
Needles tear down
Layered tunnels
Down
Deep Down
Down under
Simultaneously pointing
Perceptions
Incongruent
To my presence
While capturing
Finite moments
Of infinity
Looping elements
Supplementing
A shallow soul
Tossed
Up and down
In a sand clock
Up and down
By the minute
To breathe
In a sand clock
Of sacrosanct boundaries
Everything else
Remain reflections
Subordinating
The moment
Ticking now
What an interesting interpretation - you capture that sense of infinity one gets when looking at the orb.
ReplyDeleteNow that I look at the orb, everything does seem to moving around and around like my watch! All at the same time, capturing those finite moments!
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Of infinity... what a cool ode to your watch... time is a big topic..ha...the older i get, the more... smiles.. i love neruda...would love to be able to read him in spanish
Nice rhythm! I enjoyed following it :)
ReplyDeleteto breath inside the sand clock...within the hourglass..
ReplyDeletethat part stuck out to me...not always easy either.
as it is always flowing....
I like "Finite moments of infinity" and the repetition of in second stanza. Nice rhythm.
ReplyDeleteA very interesting ode to the watch, that finite instrument of the infinite realm.
ReplyDeletevery nice and well done, i like the way it makes you feel time and experience it.
ReplyDeleteVery well done ode.. Really love this, the finite moments of infinity really caught me
ReplyDeleteWonderful Neruda form! It comes in bursts of delights. Nicely wrapped up, Akila!
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tossed up and down in a sand clock… perfect! The Neruda form really melts anything superfluous away, doesn't' it?
ReplyDeleteWhat a great ode to that wormhole of thing we call timepiece -- something that seems to becoming an artefact as watches are replaced by cellphones as time-tellers. Love the paradox of "sand clock / of sacrosanct boundaries," as if the slippage of time was a fixed given of human existence (though not necessarily of any other specie of being). I used the same image for my piece, seeing also the abyss opening there. Fine work.
ReplyDeleteFinite moments of infinity…yes, and when we are inside that sand clock (as we always are) the rest of life is merely reflection. Terrific ode. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI love the "finite moments of infinity". Great response to the challenge!
ReplyDeleteVery well done with the theme. An integral part of our life can be such nice poetry.
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Of infinity"
was a great line...thanks for posting!
I love it Akila ~ never thought of doing an ode to the ticking clock ~
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