tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post7980084502673892845..comments2023-06-11T08:03:00.675-07:00Comments on Novel ideas!: IN YOU, WITH YOU (barbaric love)TCPChttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01735466017293465064noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-72678823439977629782013-06-13T11:51:11.486-07:002013-06-13T11:51:11.486-07:00Fine story. It never occurred to me that the man ...Fine story. It never occurred to me that the man had desires and a story. Contrary to my character, this one makes no attempt to take something which could die. The mannequin is the perfect choice. I also enjoy the pacing and refrain in this mighty ballad.Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-29370584263306725422013-06-13T11:48:57.891-07:002013-06-13T11:48:57.891-07:00Incredible writing conveying beauty in the "t...Incredible writing conveying beauty in the "troll's" thinking. Amazing perspective through your words.Maggie Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13044824920398442496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-43030093477950743532013-06-13T07:21:53.513-07:002013-06-13T07:21:53.513-07:00A crazy, romantic, vivid, witty, pleasing narrativ...A crazy, romantic, vivid, witty, pleasing narrative. Just loved this, Akila. Awesome!Panchalihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08832164041967778122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-72954676228852306282013-06-13T06:23:34.922-07:002013-06-13T06:23:34.922-07:00I love the way you work the repetition!I love the way you work the repetition!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-5378125516050948892013-06-13T06:05:13.318-07:002013-06-13T06:05:13.318-07:00I am very interested to see how you took on the na...I am very interested to see how you took on the narrative voice of the strange man in green. It was intriguing to read from his perspective, the events which unfolded in the clip.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-1186116537847835482013-06-13T02:08:59.745-07:002013-06-13T02:08:59.745-07:00Wow love it..its dark and awesomeWow love it..its dark and awesomeAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11496129504787572149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-53600621889135286312013-06-12T19:55:20.425-07:002013-06-12T19:55:20.425-07:00I admire how you built a narrative around the man ...I admire how you built a narrative around the man from the sewer and the model. This piece works well even out side of the clip. The first stanza sets a tone which is somber but vibrantly so: sorry if that seems like an oxymoron. For some reason the line Silenced by grief at tombstones really struck a chord and resonated with me. What a powerful line, delivered cleanly and without apology.<br /><br />Well done and viva la!Isadora Gruyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036782300945079952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-16098097450121969772013-06-12T19:53:51.350-07:002013-06-12T19:53:51.350-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Isadora Gruyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036782300945079952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-69163126753255711892013-06-12T16:08:37.968-07:002013-06-12T16:08:37.968-07:00Yes, it can be seen as romantic (I did not think o...Yes, it can be seen as romantic (I did not think of this monkey business in the face of such intimate depths of the clips) but then vampires and werewolves are in it seems in Love's forbidden magic evidently only strong coffee can replace our addictions in the night.L. Edgar Ottohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00525169618204198073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-8564263716886913692013-06-12T16:04:46.692-07:002013-06-12T16:04:46.692-07:00This:
"Leading me to
I, find my way to find ...This:<br /><br />"Leading me to<br />I, find my way to find my life<br />In you, with you."<br /><br />This is so pressing and personal and I love the leading following feeling that you evoked in this poem. Well done!!Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-68532122467792058672013-06-12T15:05:07.314-07:002013-06-12T15:05:07.314-07:00I certainly didn't see it as a love poem, but ...I certainly didn't see it as a love poem, but you did...well done!<br />KKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-3709851010474629912013-06-12T14:15:56.872-07:002013-06-12T14:15:56.872-07:00I like the way you mentioned the roses. Your voice...I like the way you mentioned the roses. Your voice is telling a rather haunting tale! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3267755887536052469.post-40541450971582359102013-06-12T13:38:54.224-07:002013-06-12T13:38:54.224-07:00Wow! What a tale of love! You took a direction wit...Wow! What a tale of love! You took a direction with this piece I hadn't even considered. Love it!!Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.com